Saturday, November 5, 2011

The Legend

Here is an update, I may re-write it again because I don;t like the very last part of it but let me know what you think of it.

As Sakura found out the truth of King Nathan and his family, she started a book and would hope that her spell would help keep evil away when it would be buried.  Nica had threatened Sakura one day in the country.

Sakura was going for a walk on her parents property in the country and  Nica had found her.

“Well well, it is you that has fallen in love with my brother who will be king but I deserve to be Queen!!!” Nica said.

“I don’t think you deserve to be queen Nica!” said Sakura
“I may not deserve it but I do and I will make you pay for it with death and your unborn child!” Nica said

“Brrrawwww…darkness follows while laughter hids where no light shall shine, bring forth evil on the unborn child of Sakura and the king, my brother” Nica shouted while jumping around Sakura in a wild dance.

Sakura didn’t know what to make of it but she went home and penned what happened into the book along with the incantation that Nica said, Sakura hoped that her unborn child would not die and that the child would be strong enough to bring down Nica When the time would come.

Sakura never told the king about the encounter and only told him of the news she was with child. Sakura wanted to be happy and have a happy life with her husband and their unborn child.

8 months had passed and the Sakura went into labor for many hours, she was in pain for she decided on a natural birth and wanted the child to come into the world free of any medicine that was may have been used.

14 comments:

  1. interesting information.

    i'm not sure what to say about this part. it seems like one of those alternate chapters that switches scenes and then the next chapter brings you back to the story.

    i wonder if there is a better way to get this information out?

    i'm ambivalent on what could be done to improve it. i'm just not sure, but the information is good...

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  2. hi, i like the names you chose. this section is flashback, right?

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  3. hi - first, is this part in the book with all the history that matt went to look up in the attic trunk? that would be good, i guess. anyways, if not, i think this part is better on like a back cover or inside a book jacket. imo, it messes up the flow of where you left off. i like the ideas tho. thanx bye :D

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  4. Yikes! I check for an update Friday & didn't see anything. Glad you're still at it!

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  5. Let me suggest something rather Greek, for the section above: Put this part into a Prologue (from the Greek word ‘prologos’) along with any other miscellaneous information. By doing so, you could neatly get the background details and the earlier part of the Sakura-Nica story from interrupting the story’s flow -----.

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  6. what happened to king august ? di you change the name to nathan?

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  7. Sakura is a Japanese name, also a main character (Sakura Haruno) in the Naruto series. Sakura there means "Forehead Girl." Japan is a long way from Greece ;)

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  8. I would like to add another idea to the comments. Matt & Klohe could have a conversation & he could tell Klohe about his investigation & about Sakura ?

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  9. Thank you everyone for commenting, my goal today is print out everything I have and go through it and then maybe re-write the last entry or just take it out.

    I will try to update next Friday, hopefully will have everything sorted with my writing.

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  10. Also to Turning Japanese; Sakura means cherry blossoms and not "forhead girl". Ino call Sakura forhead girl in the naruto series to pick on her.

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  11. Hi.

    Just came by to wish you a very nice Thanksgiving holiday. Cheers.

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  12. Happy Thanksgiving!

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  13. Hello BellaCassandra:

    Wishing you and your family a happy and healthy Thanksgiving!

    Kimberly

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