tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8228126688974781650.post6100839089679049265..comments2022-01-18T08:51:45.300-05:00Comments on Cassandra's Sharing Corner: Did write plus it is beautiful out!BellaCassandrahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03431481601106736767noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8228126688974781650.post-57002448340864398152011-08-10T14:27:06.988-04:002011-08-10T14:27:06.988-04:00Thank you Rus and Jonathon S, you have brought som...Thank you Rus and Jonathon S, you have brought some things to my attention which is goo and I like feedback too. I have done some writing today and hopefully you will like what I have.BellaCassandrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03431481601106736767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8228126688974781650.post-86188938194999520172011-08-09T23:19:24.448-04:002011-08-09T23:19:24.448-04:00i agree. some of the history could be cut & m...i agree. some of the history could be cut & maybe weaved in later if needed. maybe the title will give a hint of what the novel is about. i also like the story, only i wish it had more detail about the legend. there's some mention of a family but all the characters are school friends. is Klohe an only child...i wonder? maybe the next installment will reveal more. nice work.Russnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8228126688974781650.post-30738880995981749272011-08-08T20:41:13.228-04:002011-08-08T20:41:13.228-04:00Hi BellaCassandra:
I like what you've writte...Hi BellaCassandra: <br /><br />I like what you've written especially the legend part of the story. In my opinion (and its only an opinion), the 'Khlohe-Matt childhood friends/potential love interest' and the 'Khlohe's friends Jane and Mary hate Matt' subplots seem to be overshadowing the best part of your story -- how Klohe's legend background is going to resolve one or more greater conflicts.<br /><br />You have a nice flare for telling a story and some real good imagination, but these familiar subplots do seem to drag down the story's pace, as you've noticed. But I wouldn't worry about it until you get to your first rewrite stage. <br /><br />After reading your blog, a few questions I've been thinking about which may be helpful to you:<br /><br />1) What is the legend? (We should really know 'something' by now)<br />2) Why is Klohe obsessed with learning about the legend?<br />3) Will finding out about the legend change Klohe? In what ways?<br />4) Who and/or what is Klohe going to have to fight ? <br />5) Will the changes in Klohe affect her current relationships and her future? How so?<br /><br />I admire that you'll be using your vacation to write more and I do think you have a very good story so far.<br /><br />Best,<br /><br />* * *Jonathan S.noreply@blogger.com